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E9 M - Use AI for focused revision feedback

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E9 M - Use AI for focused revision feedback

Mini-description: Use AI or simulated AI feedback to check one clear revision focus in your own English text: structure, cohesion or one to two grammar targets. Keep your original draft, question the feedback and decide yourself what to change.

Learning loop: English first → understand → respond → ask → hint → improve → use again.

Deutsch-Hilfe: Du lässt nicht den ganzen Text neu schreiben. Du wählst einen kleinen Fokus, prüfst das Feedback und überarbeitest selbst.

Einleitung

This aiMOOC is for English as a first foreign language, Year 9, M-level, Baden-Württemberg. You practise focused revision at about B1 level. You work with longer short texts, familiar authentic language, moderate natural audio and increasingly independent choices.

Your text stays your text. AI feedback can be useful, but it can also be wrong, too general or unsuitable. Keep the first draft, verify facts and language claims, and accept only changes you can explain.

Safety first: Use only school-approved tools when your teacher allows them. Never enter private social-media data, real application data, passwords, addresses or other sensitive information. Use fictional profiles for practice. Recordings are voluntary and stay private unless you actively choose otherwise. No unrequested uploads and no automatic access to external AI tools.

I-can goals

By the end, you can say:

I can choose one clear revision focus.
I can ask for feedback instead of a full rewrite.
I can understand short B1-level feedback and ask a follow-up question.
I can check whether feedback fits my purpose, audience and grammar target.
I can accept, adapt or reject a suggestion and give a reason.
I can improve my own text and reuse the strategy in a new text.

Curriculum fit: M-level

The course supports English, writing, cohesion, grammar, mediation and media literacy. At M-level, learners increasingly write correspondence, reports, opinions and creative texts, connect ideas with learned language, plan texts independently and use digital tools for revision.

Before you start: quick check

Answer in English.

What is the difference between draft and final version?
Name two linking words you already use.
Which grammar point causes you most trouble?
When would you reject feedback, even if it sounds confident?

Deutsch-Hilfe: draft = Entwurf; final version = Endfassung; linking word = Verknüpfungswort; reject = ablehnen.

Media starter: What should AI do?

Watch short sections of student voices about generative AI. First watch without subtitles. Then watch again with English subtitles.

Viewing task:

Catch three words or phrases about AI.
Identify one possible benefit and one concern.
Say: “I would use AI for …, but not for … because …”

Do not translate the full video. Use context, keywords and English subtitles.

Core idea: focused revision

A useful revision cycle is short:

Choose: structure, cohesion or one/two grammar targets.
Ask: request comments, not a rewritten text.
Check: compare feedback with your task, notes, dictionary or grammar reference.
Decide: accept, adapt or reject.
Revise: make the change yourself.
Reuse: apply the same idea in a new sentence or text.

Golden rule: If you cannot explain a change, do not copy it yet.

A safe prompt frame

Use this only in a school-approved AI tool, or let a partner/teacher simulate the feedback.

Feedback request: “I am a Year 9 B1-level learner of English. Read my text, but do not rewrite it. Check only [structure / cohesion / grammar target]. Give me three short comments in clear B1 English. For each comment: point to the place, explain the problem briefly and give a hint. Do not give a full corrected version. Ask me one question at the end.”

Optional second turn: “I do not understand comment 2. Give me a smaller hint, not the answer.”

Deutsch-Hilfe: Wähle im Prompt nur einen Schwerpunkt. Bitte um Hinweise, nicht um eine komplette Neufassung.

Reading: a fictional application email

All data below are fictional.

Subject: School media team

Dear Ms Clark,

I am writing to apply for the school media team. I enjoy writing short reports and taking photos. Last term I helped with our class blog and interviewed two teachers for a project. I learned to plan questions and check facts.

I am interested in the sports section because I often follow school events. However, I sometimes use “and” too often when I write. Last year I have designed posters for our charity day. I also wrote captions, but some sentences was too long.

I would be happy to meet the team and show you some fictional practice examples.

Best wishes, Maya Reed

Read and respond:

What is Maya’s purpose?
Find two strengths in the content.
Find one cohesion point that could be improved.
Find the two grammar targets hidden in the text, but do not correct them yet.

Context vocabulary

Word or phrase	Meaning in simple English	Use it
draft	a first version	first draft
revise	improve a text after feedback	revise a paragraph
structure	how ideas and paragraphs are organised	clear structure
cohesion	how sentences and ideas connect	improve cohesion
feedback	comments that help improvement	focused feedback
suggestion	an idea you may accept or reject	useful suggestion
evidence	a reason or example that supports an idea	give evidence
verify	check if something is correct	verify a claim

Deutsch-Hilfe: cohesion = sprachlicher Zusammenhalt; verify = überprüfen; evidence = Beleg/Begründung.

Listening and viewing: better writing

Watch for practical revision advice.

Listen – understand – respond:

Note three pieces of advice in English.
Choose the one that would help Maya’s email most.
Explain your choice in two sentences.

Cohesion: connect ideas, do not decorate them

Cohesion helps the reader follow your thinking. Useful B1 links include because, however, although, for example, first, then, finally, so.

Mini-task: Improve the flow without making the text longer.

“I enjoy writing reports. I like taking photos. I want to join the media team.”

Try two versions with different linking words. Then decide which sounds clearer.

Pronunciation and fluency

Say these short signposts aloud in meaningful chunks: for example | however | because of this | in my opinion | finally.

Focus on clarity, stress and smooth chunks. You do not need to copy one accent. Verständlichkeit comes before accent imitation.

Optional private recording: Record 20–30 seconds on your own device, listen once, then delete or keep it privately. Do not upload it unless you explicitly choose to do so.

Functional grammar: choose only one or two targets

Do not ask for every grammar error at once. Choose what helps your message.

Target	Function	Compare
Past simple vs present perfect	finished time vs experience/result	Last year I designed … / I have designed posters before.
Subject–verb agreement	match subject and verb	The sentence was … / The sentences were …
Articles	show whether a noun is general or specific	a project / the project
Relative clauses	add useful information	The article that I wrote …

For the Maya text, a sensible pair is past simple vs present perfect and subject–verb agreement.

Grammar check after viewing: Why does a finished time phrase such as “last year” usually point you towards the past simple?

Speaking: feedback conference

Work with a partner. One person is the writer, one is the reviewer.

Reviewer: Give one strength and one focused hint. Writer: Ask one follow-up question and decide what to do.

Useful language:

Reviewer: “Your main idea is clear. I would check …”

Writer: “Do you mean this sentence?”

Reviewer: “Yes. Look at the time phrase.”

Writer: “I’ll change it because …” / “I’ll keep it because …”

Then swap roles.

Writing: revise without losing your voice

Choose one path.

Structure: Check paragraph order, opening, evidence and ending.
Cohesion: Check repeated connectors, references and logical links.
Grammar: Check only one or two agreed targets.

Write a revised version yourself. Do not paste in a full AI rewrite.

Revision note: Add one sentence after your text:

“I changed … because … . I kept … because … .”

Feedback ladder

Use the smallest help that works.

Level 1 – Ask: “Which sentence should I check?”
Level 2 – Hint: “Look at the time phrase / connector / subject.”
Level 3 – Compare: “Which of these two patterns fits the meaning?”
Level 4 – Improve: Rewrite the sentence yourself.
Level 5 – Use again: Make a new sentence with the same pattern.

Do not jump straight to a full corrected text.

Error analysis: make feedback useful

Keep a tiny revision log.

Code	What I noticed	My decision	Why?
S	structure	accept / adapt / reject	purpose and reader
C	cohesion	accept / adapt / reject	flow and meaning
T	tense	accept / adapt / reject	time reference
SV	subject–verb agreement	accept / adapt / reject	subject form

A confident AI answer is not automatically correct. Check difficult points with your notes, a dictionary, a grammar reference, your teacher or a second reliable source.

Mediation: explain the feedback, not every word

Your partner understands German better than English. Explain the main feedback in German in 30–40 seconds, then switch back to English and show the exact sentence you will revise.

Do not translate the whole text. Select only the information your partner needs.

Deutsch-Hilfe: Gib sinngemäß weiter, worauf beim Überarbeiten geachtet werden soll. Keine Vollübersetzung.

AI check: four questions before you accept feedback

Does it fit the task?
Can I verify it?
Does it keep my meaning and voice?
Can I explain the change myself?

For facts, quotations or sources, always verify them independently. AI can invent details or sources.

Transfer: use the strategy again

Write a new 80–120 word text in a different genre: a short blog post, report, opinion paragraph or fictional application message.

This time, choose a different focus. If you checked grammar before, check cohesion now. Use the same cycle: choose → ask → check → decide → revise → reuse.

Can-do check

I can …	Not yet	With help	On my own
choose one revision focus	□	□	□
ask for comments instead of a rewrite	□	□	□
understand focused B1 feedback	□	□	□
question and verify feedback	□	□	□
explain why I accepted or rejected a suggestion	□	□	□
reuse the strategy in a new text	□	□	□

Next course: E9 M - Apply revision choices in a second draft

Interaktive Aufgaben

Quiz: Teste Dein Wissen

What is the best first step before asking for revision feedback? (Choose one clear revision focus) (!Ask for a complete rewrite) (!Upload every text you have) (!Check all grammar points at once)

What should focused AI feedback do? (Give short comments and hints on the chosen target) (!Replace the whole text) (!Change the writer's opinion) (!Add private information)

Which focus checks how ideas and sentences connect? (Cohesion) (!Volume) (!Accent) (!Formatting)

Which sentence uses the past simple for a finished time? (Last year I designed a poster.) (!Last year I have designed a poster.) (!I designing a poster last year.) (!I have design a poster last year.)

What should you do if AI feedback sounds confident but seems wrong? (Check it with another reliable source) (!Copy it immediately) (!Delete your original draft) (!Assume the AI is always correct)

Which action protects your authorship best? (Keep your original draft and make the revision yourself) (!Paste in a full AI rewrite) (!Remove all earlier versions) (!Let the tool choose your final opinion)

Which information should not be entered into an external AI tool for this practice? (Private personal data) (!A fictional sentence) (!A grammar target) (!A made-up profile)

What is a useful follow-up when you do not understand feedback? (Ask for a smaller hint) (!Ask for the full answer) (!Ignore the focus) (!Switch to an unrelated task)

What matters most in pronunciation practice here? (Being understandable) (!Copying one exact accent) (!Speaking as fast as possible) (!Avoiding every pause)

What is the final step in the revision cycle? (Use the strategy again in a new context) (!Forget the feedback) (!Translate the whole text) (!Replace your own style)

Memory

Revision	Improving a draft
Cohesion	Connecting ideas clearly
Structure	Organising paragraphs and ideas
Feedback	Comments for improvement
Verify	Check if something is correct
Draft	First version of a text
Hint	Small help without the full answer
Transfer	Using a strategy in a new context

Drag and Drop

Ordne die richtigen Begriffe zu.	Thema
Choose	Select one revision focus
Ask	Request short focused feedback
Check	Verify the feedback
Decide	Accept adapt or reject
Reuse	Apply the strategy in a new text

Kreuzworträtsel

Cohesion	What connects ideas and sentences in a text?
Structure	What organises the parts of a text?
Feedback	What gives comments for improvement?
Privacy	What should you protect when using digital tools?
Revise	What verb means to improve a draft?
Context	What helps you infer the meaning of an unknown word?

LearningApps

Lückentext

Offene Aufgaben

Leicht

Focus card: Create a small card with three choices: structure, cohesion and grammar. Add one example question for each.
Linking-word swap: Improve three short sentences by testing two different linking words and explain which version is clearer.
Grammar target: Choose one grammar target from the course and write four correct example sentences with two different contexts.
AI safety poster: Design a mini-poster with five rules for safe feedback use, including privacy and keeping the original draft.

Standard

Revision log: Revise a 100-word text and document three decisions: one accepted suggestion, one adapted suggestion and one rejected suggestion.
Feedback conference: Record or perform a voluntary private two-minute partner dialogue in which one learner gives a hint and the other asks a follow-up question.
Mediation note: Explain the main English feedback to a German-speaking partner without translating the full text.
Prompt comparison: Write two feedback prompts for the same text. Compare which one is more focused and explain why.

Schwer

Feedback audit: Compare AI, peer and teacher feedback on the same short fictional text. Group the comments into structure, cohesion and grammar.
Verification task: Pick three language claims from feedback and verify each with a reliable dictionary, grammar reference or teacher-approved source.
Fictional application: Write a fictional application email and short CV profile, request only two targeted feedback areas and revise the documents yourself.
Genre transfer: Apply one revision strategy to two different genres, such as a report and a blog opinion, and explain what changed between the genres.

Lernkontrolle

Decision reasoning: You receive four feedback comments on a fictional B1 text. Decide which two you would use and justify each decision with meaning, audience and language evidence.
Cohesion analysis: Compare two short paragraphs with the same content but different linking. Explain which connections are easier to follow and why.
Grammar in context: Correct only the tense and subject–verb agreement in a short text, then explain how each correction changes grammatical accuracy without changing the writer’s message.
Feedback verification: Identify one feedback comment that is too vague, one that is useful and one that may be wrong. Improve the vague comment and show how you would verify the doubtful one.
Transfer: Write a new 100-word text, choose one revision focus, document one accepted and one rejected suggestion, and explain how the final version remains your own work.
Mediation transfer: Summarise the most important English revision advice for a German-speaking classmate in a short German message, then give one English example sentence.

Lernnachweis

For a successful learning record, show that you can:

keep and compare an original draft and a revised version;
choose a narrow revision focus;
ask for hints instead of a complete rewrite;
understand and question B1-level feedback;
verify doubtful grammar or factual claims;
explain why you accepted, adapted or rejected feedback;
protect private information and use fictional data in practice tasks;
revise the text yourself and keep your own voice;
transfer the same strategy to a new genre or context.

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Media note: Wikimedia Commons files used here provide reusable licensing information on their file pages. YouTube videos are embedded from official educational or university channels; no media download is required.

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