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E9 E - Plan, draft, revise and edit independently

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E9 E - Plan, draft, revise and edit independently

Mini-Beschreibung: Plan a text largely on your own, then improve content, organisation, cohesion, vocabulary, grammar, spelling and register in focused steps. The course is for Englisch as a first foreign language, Klasse 9, E-Niveau in Baden-Württemberg.

Course rhythm: English first → understand → respond → ask → hint → improve → use again. German support is short and strategic; there is no full translation.

Media start: Watch the first part of the video. Note two differences between revising and editing. Then look at the mind map: Which planning method would help you most for an opinion text, and why?

I-can goals

I can plan purpose, audience, main idea and structure before I draft.
I can draft a coherent text without trying to make every sentence perfect immediately.
I can revise content, organisation and cohesion in more than one focused pass.
I can edit vocabulary, grammar, spelling, punctuation and register.
I can use feedback critically, keep my own voice and explain why I accept or reject a suggestion.
I can check sources and media before I use information in my text.

Activate your prior knowledge

Without a dictionary, finish these prompts in English: A good draft needs..., A useful paragraph..., One thing I often check too late is.... Compare with a partner and ask one spontaneous follow-up question.

Core input: the writing cycle

A strong text usually grows through several passes. Do not mix every job at once.

Step	Main question	Typical action
Plan	What is my purpose, audience and line of thought?	collect, select, order
Draft	Have I turned my plan into a complete first version?	write forward, mark gaps
Revise	Does the text say the right things in the right order?	add, cut, move, connect
Edit	Is the language accurate and appropriate?	improve words, grammar, spelling, punctuation, register
Proofread	What small errors remain?	slow final check

Key idea: Revision changes meaning and structure; editing improves the language surface. Good writers often move back and forth between steps.

Listening and viewing

Watch the revision/editing video again. Pause after a useful point and write a six-word note. Then answer in English:

What should you check before grammar and spelling?
Which warning about digital checking tools is useful for your own work?
Ask a partner one question beginning with Why... or How....

Now listen for linking words. Choose three expressions you could reuse in a discussion or text. Do not copy whole sentences; reuse the function.

Reading: diagnose a draft

Read this short draft for a school magazine:

Draft: Our school should create one quiet study zone during lunch. Some students want to finish homework, read or prepare for a test, but the cafeteria and corridors are often noisy. A quiet room could help them use their time well. On the other hand, lunch is also a social break and nobody should be forced to be silent. The best solution might be an optional room with clear rules. This would give students a choice. It could also be tested for four weeks before the school decides whether to continue it.

Read like an editor, not a translator. Identify the claim, one supporting reason, one different perspective and the proposed solution. Then suggest one change that would improve cohesion.

Context vocabulary

Writing move	Useful English	Use it for
purpose	aim, focus, message	deciding what the text should achieve
evidence	example, fact, source, detail	supporting a point
cohesion	however, therefore, in addition, for example	showing relationships
revision	add, cut, move, combine, clarify	changing ideas and structure
editing	precise, accurate, appropriate, consistent	improving language
feedback	strength, question, suggestion, next step	discussing a draft

Use a dictionary to check meaning, word class, typical combinations and example sentences. Do not replace every simple word with a longer one.

Pronunciation and fluency

Say these words in short chunks: revise – revision – organise – organisation – evidence – argument – register. Mark the stressed syllable, then read your own two-sentence feedback aloud. Aim for clear stress and understandable rhythm, not accent-free speech.

Speaking: a two-minute peer conference

Student A explains the purpose and one problem in the draft. Student B responds with:

One strength is...
I was not sure about...
Could you explain why...?
One next step could be...

Then switch roles. Ask at least one spontaneous follow-up question.

Writing task

Write a 180–230 word opinion article for a fictional school magazine: What makes feedback useful for teenage writers?

Use at least two ideas from the learning media or class material, but paraphrase them in your own words. Include:

a clear introduction and position,
two developed points,
one different perspective or limitation,
linking words that show relationships,
a short conclusion.

Keep every draft. Your final version should show at least three meaningful revisions, not only corrected spelling.

Functional grammar: make relationships visible

Grammar supports meaning. Practise the patterns you actually need:

contrast: Although feedback can help, the writer must decide what to change.
reason: I revised the paragraph because the example was unclear.
result: The order was confusing, so I moved the second paragraph.
relative clause: A source that has a named author is easier to check.
modal choice: You should clarify the claim. / You could add an example.

After viewing, choose one paragraph from your draft. Underline the topic sentence and circle the words that connect ideas.

Revision passes: one focus at a time

Use the code C–O–CO–V–G–S–R.

Pass	Check	Action
C – Content	Is every idea relevant and supported?	add or cut
O – Organisation	Is the order logical?	move or group
CO – Cohesion	Are relationships between ideas clear?	connect or repeat key terms carefully
V – Vocabulary	Are words precise and natural?	replace vague or repeated words
G – Grammar	Are sentence patterns and tenses controlled?	fix recurring patterns
S – Spelling	Are spelling and punctuation accurate?	proofread slowly
R – Register	Does the language fit reader and purpose?	remove language that is too casual or too formal

Support levels

Level 1 – Independent: Use only the C–O–CO–V–G–S–R checklist.
Level 2 – Prompts: Ask yourself: What is my strongest point? Where might a reader get lost? Which sentence sounds too general?
Level 3 – Frames: Use: My main point is... / One example is... / However... / This matters because... / In conclusion...

Move back to a lower-support level when you can.

Feedback that improves the text

Give feedback on the text, not on the person. Start with meaning and structure, then language. A useful pattern is: strength → question → specific next step.

Do not rewrite your partner's text. The writer decides which suggestions to use and records one reason: I accepted this because... or I kept my version because....

Error analysis

After editing, choose three corrections and classify them: grammar, vocabulary, spelling/punctuation, cohesion or register. For each one, write the old version, the new version and a short rule or reminder. Look for a pattern you can use next time.

Source and media check

Before you use a claim, ask: Who created it? When? For what purpose? What evidence is given? Can another reliable source confirm it? A polished video or AI answer can still contain mistakes.

AI rule: Keep your original text and verify facts, sources and feedback. Never paste private data into an external AI service. Use school-approved tools only when your teacher or school permits them.

Mediation

A younger German-speaking student asks what revision means. In 60–80 German words, explain the three most useful English-course steps for improving a draft. Select what the student needs; do not translate the whole course.

Privacy and responsible media use

Use fictional names, profiles and application data. Do not include private social-media information. Audio or video recording is voluntary and stays private unless you explicitly agree to share it in the class context. Do not upload recordings, drafts or personal data to external services without permission.

Transfer

Take your opinion article and adapt its core message into a 90–120 word email to a teacher. Change the greeting, level of formality, sentence choices and closing. Keep the key ideas but adjust the register for the new audience.

Can-do check

I can...	Not yet	With some help	Independently
plan for purpose and audience	□	□	□
draft a complete text from my plan	□	□	□
revise content, organisation and cohesion	□	□	□
edit vocabulary, grammar, spelling and register	□	□	□
explain and use feedback critically	□	□	□
check sources and keep my own version	□	□	□

Follow-up course

Continue with E9 E - Build arguments with evidence and counterarguments: compare perspectives, select evidence and write a more source-based argument.

Interaktive Aufgaben

Quiz: Teste Dein Wissen

What is the main job of revision? (To improve ideas, structure and clarity) (!To correct only spelling) (!To make every sentence longer) (!To replace all simple words)

What should you decide before drafting? (Purpose and audience) (!Font and page colour) (!Every final punctuation mark) (!The exact number of adjectives)

Which action mainly belongs to organisation? (Moving a paragraph to a better place) (!Checking one spelling mistake) (!Changing a comma) (!Looking up one word)

Which word can show contrast? (However) (!Therefore) (!Because) (!For example)

What does register describe? (Language choices that fit purpose and audience) (!The number of paragraphs) (!The source publication date) (!The speed of handwriting)

What is useful peer feedback? (A specific strength, question and next step) (!A complete rewrite by the partner) (!Only a mark with no comment) (!A list of every possible synonym)

Why should you keep your first draft? (To see and explain your revision process) (!To avoid revising anything) (!To publish all mistakes) (!To replace the final version)

What should you do with an AI-generated fact? (Check it against reliable sources) (!Use it immediately because it sounds clear) (!Remove the source information) (!Treat it as your own evidence)

What is cohesion? (Clear connections between sentences and text parts) (!Perfect handwriting) (!A list of difficult words) (!A title written in capitals)

What is proofreading best used for? (A final careful check for remaining small errors) (!Choosing the topic for the first time) (!Replacing the whole argument) (!Collecting all research sources)

Memory

Plan	purpose and audience
Draft	first complete version
Revision	ideas and structure
Editing	language accuracy
Cohesion	links between ideas
Register	language for reader and situation
Evidence	support for a claim
Proofreading	final small-error check

Drag and Drop

Ordne die richtigen Begriffe zu.	Thema
Revision	big changes to meaning and structure
Editing	language accuracy and appropriateness
Organisation	logical order of ideas
Cohesion	clear links between text parts
Register	language that fits audience and purpose

Kreuzworträtsel

Planning	What stage defines purpose, audience and structure before drafting?
Audience	Who is the intended reader of a text?
Cohesion	What term means clear links between sentences and text parts?
Register	What term describes language choices that fit reader and situation?
Evidence	What supports a claim with facts, examples or source-based detail?
Revision	What process changes ideas, order and clarity after a draft?

LearningApps

Lückentext

Offene Aufgaben

Leicht

Checklist remix: Turn C–O–CO–V–G–S–R into a one-page personal checklist with one question for each category.
Connector hunt: Find five linking expressions in a school text and label their function: addition, contrast, reason, result or example.
Feedback practice: Give one strength, one question and one next step on the sample draft.
Register switch: Rewrite four informal chat-style sentences so they fit a school magazine.

Standard

Visible revision: Write a 150-word draft, revise it in two passes and highlight three meaningful changes.
Source check: Compare two online sources on the same non-sensitive school topic and explain which details make each source more or less useful.
Peer conference: Record a private two-minute peer-feedback conversation only if both students agree; otherwise perform it live without recording.
Mediation card: Create a short German advice card for a younger learner that explains revision without translating the full English material.

Schwer

Perspective article: Write a 220-word article that presents your view, a contrasting perspective and evidence from two checked sources.
Error pattern study: Collect six corrections from your own writing, group them by type and create a personal prevention strategy.
Reverse outline: Give every paragraph of your draft a five-word label, test the order and reorganise the text if needed.
Revision talk: Present your draft-to-final process in three minutes and answer two spontaneous audience questions.

Lernkontrolle

Plan for a new audience: You receive the same topic for a class blog and for a formal email. Create two short plans and justify the differences.
Prioritise changes: Given a draft with content, organisation and language problems, decide which three changes should come first and explain why.
Repair cohesion: Reorder a mixed-up paragraph and add only the connectors that are necessary for clear relationships.
Evaluate feedback: Compare two pieces of feedback on the same paragraph. Decide which suggestions you would use and justify each choice.
Check a claim: Trace one factual claim to its source, test whether the evidence supports it and write a cautious source-based sentence.
Change the register: Adapt a school-magazine paragraph into an email to a teacher without changing the central message.

Lernnachweis

For a successful learning record, show:

a clear plan with purpose, audience and structure,
a complete first draft,
evidence of revision in content, organisation and cohesion,
evidence of editing in vocabulary, grammar, spelling and register,
one checked source or media note,
short reflection on feedback you accepted or rejected,
a final version that remains recognisably your own work.

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