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= Einleitung =

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'''Mini-description:''' Revise your own text independently. Improve '''content, structure, cohesion, register, vocabulary, grammar, spelling and source use''', then document the changes that matter.

This aiMOOC is for '''English as a first foreign language, Grade 10, E level, Baden-Württemberg'''. You work mainly in English. German is used only when it helps you understand a difficult step or complete a short mediation task.

'''Core rule:''' Improve meaning before correcting commas.

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== I can ... ==

# [[Writing|Writing]]: I can revise a complete draft independently and keep my own ideas.
# [[Text structure|Structure]]: I can reorganise paragraphs so that the text has a clear purpose and line of thought.
# [[Cohesion|Cohesion]]: I can connect ideas with suitable reference words and linking expressions.
# [[Register|Register]]: I can adapt tone and formality to purpose, audience and text type.
# [[Vocabulary|Vocabulary]]: I can replace vague or repetitive wording with precise, natural language.
# [[Grammar|Grammar]]: I can correct important grammar errors without making the text unnecessarily complex.
# [[Spelling|Spelling]]: I can proofread spelling and punctuation systematically.
# [[Source criticism|Source use]]: I can check whether a source supports my point and identify where information comes from.
# [[Feedback|Feedback]]: I can use feedback selectively and explain why I accepted or rejected it.
# [[Revision|Revision log]]: I can document important changes between draft and final version.

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== Activate your prior knowledge ==

Before you start, take one text you wrote recently. Keep the original version.

'''Quick check:'''
# What is the text trying to achieve?
# Who is the reader?
# Which paragraph is strongest?
# Which sentence is hardest to understand?
# Which source, fact or quotation needs checking?

Do not correct anything yet. First diagnose the text.

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= Input: Revise in layers =

Good revision is not one long spellcheck. It is a sequence of focused decisions. Work from the '''big picture''' to the '''small details'''.

[[Datei:The Wrting Process.jpg|500px|rahmenlos|center]]

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== The eight-lens revision check ==

{| class="wikitable"
! Lens
! Ask yourself
! Typical action
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| '''Content'''
| Does every key idea support my purpose?
| Add, cut or clarify information.
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| '''Structure'''
| Is the order logical for this reader?
| Move paragraphs or improve topic sentences.
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| '''Cohesion'''
| Can the reader follow how ideas connect?
| Add clear links, pronouns or repeated key terms.
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| '''Register'''
| Is the tone suitable for purpose and audience?
| Replace language that is too casual, too vague or too formal.
|-
| '''Vocabulary'''
| Are my words precise and natural?
| Replace repetition and empty words.
|-
| '''Grammar'''
| Are tense, agreement and sentence patterns controlled?
| Correct errors that affect accuracy or clarity.
|-
| '''Spelling'''
| Are spelling and punctuation accurate?
| Proofread slowly and separately.
|-
| '''Source use'''
| Can I trace important information and claims?
| Check source, attribution and support.
|}

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== A practical order ==

'''Pass 1 – Meaning:''' content and purpose.

'''Pass 2 – Organisation:''' structure and cohesion.

'''Pass 3 – Reader fit:''' register and vocabulary.

'''Pass 4 – Accuracy:''' grammar, spelling and punctuation.

'''Pass 5 – Evidence:''' sources, quotations, paraphrases and credits.

A change can affect more than one lens. For example, moving a sentence may improve both structure and cohesion.

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== Listening / Viewing 1: Revision before proofreading ==

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'''While viewing:''' note three actions that belong to '''editing''' rather than final proofreading.

'''After viewing:''' apply one action to your own draft and mark the changed passage.

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== Reading: Diagnose a draft ==

'''Fictional practice text:'''

''Our media club should make a weekly school podcast. It would be good and people would like it. There are many topics in school and this is important. Students can talk about events, music and problems. Also, the podcast can be interesting for parents. I think everyone should listen to it because podcasts are modern. The school website says students can share project results online, so this proves that a podcast will work. In conclusion, the school should start one soon.''

'''Your task:''' Do not rewrite the paragraph immediately. First label at least five revision needs using the eight lenses.

Possible questions:
# Is the main claim specific enough?
# Does each reason add new information?
# Is ''good'', ''interesting'' or ''modern'' precise?
# Does the school website statement really prove that the podcast will work?
# Is the conclusion stronger than a repetition?

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== Text comparison: Draft and revision ==

'''Draft:''' ''Podcasts are modern, so our school should make one.''

'''Revised:''' ''A short weekly podcast could give students another way to report on school projects and events.''

The revised sentence is not simply longer. It is more '''specific''', gives a clearer '''purpose''' and avoids a weak generalisation.

'''Transfer:''' Find one sentence in your own text where you can improve the idea without using rarer words.

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== Context vocabulary ==

# [[Draft|draft]]: a version that is not final
# [[Revise|revise]]: improve ideas, organisation and expression
# [[Edit|edit]]: improve wording, style and accuracy
# [[Proofreading|proofread]]: check the near-final text for surface errors
# [[Audience|audience]]: the intended reader or listener
# [[Purpose|purpose]]: what the text is meant to achieve
# [[Cohesion|cohesion]]: links that hold sentences and ideas together
# [[Register|register]]: language choices that fit situation and audience
# [[Evidence|evidence]]: information used to support a point
# [[Citation|citation]]: information that identifies a source
# [[Paraphrase|paraphrase]]: express source information in your own wording
# [[Credibility|credibility]]: how trustworthy a source is in context

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== Pronunciation focus ==

'''revise''' /rɪˈvaɪz/ – stress the second syllable.

'''revision''' /rɪˈvɪʒən/ – notice the changed middle sound.

'''cohesion''' /kəʊˈhiːʒən/ – stress the second syllable.

'''register''' /ˈredʒɪstə/ – stress the first syllable.

'''Goal:''' speak clearly enough to be understood. Accent imitation is not the target.

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== Listening / Viewing 2: Proofreading as a separate pass ==

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'''Viewing task:''' choose two proofreading techniques from the video. Test both on the same paragraph. Which technique helps you notice more?

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== Functional grammar for revision ==

Grammar supports meaning. Check patterns that often disturb clarity.

{| class="wikitable"
! Check
! Weak version
! Better version
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| '''Tense consistency'''
| Last week we interview students and recorded the answers.
| Last week we interviewed students and recorded the answers.
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| '''Reference'''
| The club told the class they should change it.
| The club told the class that the plan should change.
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| '''Sentence control'''
| The idea is useful, it could save time.
| The idea is useful because it could save time.
|-
| '''Parallel structure'''
| The project helps students research, speaking and to edit.
| The project helps students research, speak and edit.
|-
| '''Linking'''
| The plan is cheap. It needs time.
| The plan is cheap; however, it needs time.
|}

Do not add complex grammar only to sound advanced. Choose structures you can control.

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== Cohesion without over-linking ==

Use connectors when the relationship between ideas needs to be explicit.

'''Adding:''' moreover, in addition, also

'''Contrasting:''' however, whereas, although

'''Cause/result:''' because, therefore, as a result

'''Giving an example:''' for example, for instance

'''Concluding:''' overall, in conclusion

Avoid starting every sentence with a connector. Cohesion also comes from clear topic sentences, reference words and repeated key terms.

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== Register and vocabulary ==

Compare:

''Kids totally love this stuff.'' → suitable in some informal contexts.

''Many students may find the format engaging.'' → more suitable in a formal school proposal.

Neither sentence is automatically better. The better choice depends on '''audience, purpose and genre'''.

'''Precision rule:''' prefer the clearest word, not the rarest word.

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== Source use: check before you keep ==

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For important claims, ask:
# Who created the source?
# What evidence is given?
# Is the information current enough for this task?
# Can another reliable source confirm the point?
# Does the source really support my sentence?
# Have I clearly marked quotation, paraphrase or borrowed information?

A source that looks professional can still be weak. A source can also be reliable for one question but unsuitable for another.

'''AI note:''' If an AI tool suggests a fact, source or quotation, check the original source yourself before using it. Keep ownership of your text: do not replace your draft with an unexplained machine rewrite.

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== Media analysis: evidence and effect ==

Compare the '''information''' in the fact-checking video with its '''presentation''': title, pacing, examples, visuals and speaker style.

Write three sentences:
# One sentence about the video's main message.
# One sentence about how the medium helps or limits understanding.
# One sentence about what you would verify before using the video as evidence in a written text.

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== Peer feedback: use it, do not obey it blindly ==

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Useful feedback is '''specific, respectful and linked to the task'''.

Try:
''Your main point is clear, but I lost the connection between paragraphs 2 and 3. Could you add a sentence that shows the contrast?''

Avoid:
''This is bad.''

When you receive feedback, decide:
'''accept – adapt – reject with a reason'''.

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== Incorporating feedback ==

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Create a three-column note:
{| class="wikitable"
! Feedback
! My decision
! Reason
|-
| Example: Make the introduction shorter.
| Accept partly.
| I will cut repetition but keep the context sentence.
|}

This keeps the final text yours.

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== Optional mediation: Source checking ==

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'''Task:''' A younger student asks in English: ''How can I check whether an online source is trustworthy?''

Use the German video only as input. Give a short English answer for that student. Select the useful points; do '''not''' translate the whole video.

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== Revision log ==

After revising, document at least five meaningful changes.

{| class="wikitable"
! Before
! After
! Lens
! Why it is better
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| vague claim
| more precise claim
| Content
| clearer purpose
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| paragraph 3 before paragraph 2
| reordered paragraphs
| Structure
| stronger logical sequence
|-
| informal phrase
| audience-appropriate phrase
| Register
| better fit for reader
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| unsupported fact
| verified or removed
| Source use
| claim is traceable
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| grammar error
| corrected form
| Grammar
| more accurate and easier to read
|}

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== Help: Stop getting stuck ==

'''If the text feels too big:''' revise one paragraph at a time.

'''If you only see spelling mistakes:''' cover the last two lenses and start with content.

'''If you keep adding difficult words:''' ask whether the new word is more precise, not just more advanced.

'''If feedback conflicts:''' return to task, purpose and audience.

'''If a tool rewrites too much:''' compare with your original and keep only changes you understand and choose.

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== Error analysis ==

Create a personal error bank with no more than five recurring patterns.

Example:
{| class="wikitable"
! My pattern
! Example
! My repair strategy
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| tense switch
| ''Yesterday we discuss...''
| Mark all time signals, then check verb forms.
|-
| vague pronoun
| ''This shows it.''
| Name the idea again if reference is unclear.
|-
| repeated adjective
| ''good ... good ... good''
| Replace only where a more precise word exists.
|}

The goal is not to collect every mistake. Focus on patterns that you can fix independently.

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== Can-do check ==

Rate each statement: '''not yet – with help – independently'''.

# I can identify the purpose and audience of my text.
# I can revise content before surface errors.
# I can improve paragraph order and cohesion.
# I can adjust register without making the language unnatural.
# I can improve vocabulary for precision.
# I can find and correct recurring grammar and spelling errors.
# I can check whether a source actually supports a claim.
# I can use feedback selectively.
# I can compare draft and final version and explain major changes.
# I can keep my own voice while using digital support responsibly.

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= Interaktive Aufgaben =

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== Quiz: Teste Dein Wissen ==

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'''What should you usually check first in a full revision?'''
(Content and purpose)
(!Comma placement)
(!Font choice)
(!Rare vocabulary)

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'''Which question best checks structure?'''
(Is the order logical for the reader?)
(!Are all words long enough?)
(!Does every sentence use a connector?)
(!Is every paragraph the same length?)

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'''What is cohesion mainly about?'''
(How ideas and sentences connect)
(!How many sources a text has)
(!How formal every word sounds)
(!How fast a text was written)

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'''What determines a suitable register?'''
(Purpose audience and text type)
(!The number of paragraphs)
(!The writer's favourite words)
(!The age of the computer)

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'''Which change improves vocabulary most effectively?'''
(Replace a vague word with a precise natural one)
(!Replace every short word with a longer one)
(!Use as many synonyms as possible)
(!Avoid familiar words completely)

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'''What is proofreading mainly for?'''
(Finding surface errors in a near-final text)
(!Inventing the main argument)
(!Choosing the topic)
(!Collecting new sources)

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'''What should you do with an important factual claim from an AI tool?'''
(Check the original reliable source)
(!Assume it is correct)
(!Copy it without attribution)
(!Use it only if it sounds formal)

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'''What is useful peer feedback?'''
(Specific respectful and linked to the task)
(!A complete rewrite by the reviewer)
(!A score without explanation)
(!A list of personal preferences only)

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'''Why keep a revision log?'''
(To document important changes and reasons)
(!To make the text longer)
(!To avoid reading the final version)
(!To replace the final text)

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'''Which sentence best describes independent revision?'''
(I decide which changes improve my text and can explain why)
(!I accept every suggestion automatically)
(!I only run a spellchecker)
(!I rewrite until no original sentence remains)

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== Memory ==

<div class="memo-quiz">
{|
|-
| Content || relevance of ideas
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| Structure || logical order
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| Cohesion || connected sentences
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| Register || audience-appropriate language
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| Vocabulary || precise wording
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| Proofreading || surface-error check
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| Citation || source identification
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| Feedback || response from a reader
|}
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== Drag and Drop ==

<div class="lueckentext-quiz">

{| class="wikitable"
! Ordne die richtigen Begriffe zu.
! Thema
|-
| '''Purpose check'''
| Content
|-
| '''Paragraph order'''
| Structure
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| '''Reference words'''
| Cohesion
|-
| '''Tone choice'''
| Register
|-
| '''Precise wording'''
| Vocabulary
|-
| '''Tense consistency'''
| Grammar
|-
| '''Final typo search'''
| Proofreading
|-
| '''Credibility check'''
| Source use
|}
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== Kreuzworträtsel ==

<div class="kreuzwort-quiz">
{|
|-
| Revision || What is the process of improving a draft called?
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| Cohesion || What connects ideas and sentences in a text?
|-
| Register || What describes language choice according to situation and audience?
|-
| Audience || Who is the intended reader of a text?
|-
| Citation || What identifies a source in a text?
|-
| Proofreading || What final process checks spelling and surface errors?
|}
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== LearningApps ==

<iframe> https://learningapps.org/index.php?s=E10+E+Revise+a+text+independently </iframe>

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== Lückentext ==

<quiz display=simple>
{'''Vervollständige den Text.'''<br>
|type="{}"}
A strong revision starts with { content } before small language errors. The logical order of ideas is part of { structure }. Clear links between sentences create { cohesion }. Language that fits the reader and situation shows an appropriate { register }. A final check for spelling and punctuation is called { proofreading }. A factual claim should be connected to a reliable { source }. Useful peer comments become valuable only when the writer makes an independent { decision }. A short record of major changes is a revision { log }.
</quiz>

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= Offene Aufgaben =

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=== Leicht ===
# [[Revision diagnosis|Revision diagnosis]]: Mark one paragraph of your own writing with the eight lenses. Do not rewrite it yet.
# [[Sentence upgrade|Sentence upgrade]]: Improve five vague sentences using clearer and more precise words, but no unnecessarily rare vocabulary.
# [[Cohesion check|Cohesion check]]: Highlight reference words and connectors in one paragraph and repair one unclear connection.
# [[Proofreading routine|Proofreading routine]]: Test two proofreading techniques on the same paragraph and note which one works better for you.

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=== Standard ===
# [[Text comparison|Text comparison]]: Compare your draft and revised version. Select five changes and explain their effect on the reader.
# [[Peer feedback|Peer feedback]]: Exchange one paragraph with a partner. Give two specific comments linked to purpose, structure or language.
# [[Fictional application|Fictional application]]: Revise a fictional application email for a school project so that tone, structure and vocabulary fit the audience.
# [[Source check|Source check]]: Choose one factual claim in your text, trace it to its original source and decide whether the wording is fully supported.

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=== Schwer ===
# [[Multi-pass revision|Multi-pass revision]]: Revise a complete text in five separate passes and keep a revision log for each pass.
# [[Media comparison|Media comparison]]: Compare how one issue is presented in a written source and a video. Revise your own paragraph after analysing differences in evidence and effect.
# [[Feedback decision|Feedback decision]]: Collect feedback from two readers, compare their suggestions and justify which changes you accept, adapt or reject.
# [[Transfer task|Transfer task]]: Revise the same core message for two audiences, for example a class blog and a formal school email, and explain the changes in register and detail.

{{:Offene Aufgabe - MOOC erstellen}}

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= Lernkontrolle =

# [[Revision strategy|Revision strategy]]: You receive a draft with weak reasoning but perfect spelling. Explain which revision passes you would prioritise and why.
# [[Audience transfer|Audience transfer]]: Transform a short informal message into a formal school communication while keeping the meaning stable. Explain three language decisions.
# [[Evidence check|Evidence check]]: A paragraph contains a source that is relevant but does not support the exact claim. Revise the claim or source use and justify your decision.
# [[Feedback conflict|Feedback conflict]]: Two reviewers give opposite advice about the introduction. Decide how purpose and audience can help you judge the comments.
# [[Error pattern|Error pattern]]: Analyse three repeated language errors from your own writing and design a concrete repair strategy for the next text.
# [[Before and after|Before and after]]: Present one meaningful before-and-after example for content, cohesion and grammar and explain the effect of each change.

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= Lernnachweis =

Für einen Lernnachweis ist wichtig, dass Du:
# einen eigenen Ausgangstext und eine überarbeitete Endfassung vorlegst,
# wesentliche Änderungen mit einem kurzen revision log dokumentierst,
# mindestens die Bereiche content, structure, cohesion, register, vocabulary, grammar, spelling und source use berücksichtigst,
# bei verwendeten Quellen nachvollziehbar zeigst, wo Informationen herkommen,
# Feedback als Hilfe nutzt, aber eigene Entscheidungen begründest,
# Deinen eigenen Text und Deine eigene Stimme erkennbar erhältst,
# digitale oder KI-gestützte Vorschläge nur übernimmst, wenn Du sie verstehst und Quellenangaben überprüft hast.

'''Datenschutz:''' Aufnahmen sind freiwillig und sollen privat bleiben. Lade keine persönlichen Texte, Profile, Bewerbungen oder Aufnahmen ungefragt öffentlich hoch. Nutze für Übungsbewerbungen nur fiktive Daten. Externe KI-Zugriffe sind für diesen Kurs nicht erforderlich.

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= OERs zum Thema =

<iframe> https://de.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Schreibprozess </iframe>

'''Weiterlernen:'''
# [https://www.awelu.lu.se/writing/rewriting-stage/ Lund University: Rewriting stage]
# [https://www.ucc.ie/en/skillscentre/academicwritingstudyingresources/gimmetwominutes/ University College Cork: Editing and proofreading videos]
# [https://www.bildungsplaene-bw.de/ Bildungspläne Baden-Württemberg]

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= Folgekurs =

Next step: apply the same revision routine to a longer argumentative or analytical text with more than one source.

Possible link: [[E10 E - Compare and evaluate sources in a text|E10 E - Compare and evaluate sources in a text]]

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= Verknüpfte Lernbereiche =

{| align=center
{{:D-Tab}}
'''[[English writing skills]]'''
# [[Writing]]
# [[Revision]]
# [[Cohesion]]
# [[Register]]
# [[Vocabulary]]
# [[Grammar]]
# [[Spelling]]
# [[Source criticism]]
# [[Media literacy]]
# [[Feedback]]
|}

[[Kategorie:Englisch]]
[[Kategorie:Klasse 10]]
[[Kategorie:Baden-Württemberg]]
[[Kategorie:E-Niveau]]
[[Kategorie:Schreiben]]
[[Kategorie:Textkompetenz]]
[[Kategorie:Medienkompetenz]]
[[Kategorie:Sekundarstufe I]]

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= aiMOOC-Projekte =
[[Kategorie:AI_MOOC]] [[Kategorie:GPT aiMOOC]]
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E10 E - Revise a text independently - Versionsgeschichte

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